Project 4 Postwrite

Danielle Silva

Professor M. MacKnight

WRT 104

19 April 2011

Project 4 Postwrite

            For project four I was to write a persuasive essay taking a side on an issue in society.  I changed the topic of my paper many times to finally find one that I enjoyed and would be able to write a well-written paper on.  When I finally made my decision on my topic I decided I would write about genetic engineering and the path it is headed towards.  During the course of this project I learned that it is much easier to write a persuasive essay on something you actually have a strong opinion about.  When I started to read articles on genetic engineering I realized that I developed a strong side for genetic engineering but also against it.  This is explained in my thesis which was, “Although scientific advancements in the future will allow for genetic engineering of embryos, the technology should only be used to prevent life changing diseases.”  I also learned that it is better to eliminate the amount of quotations in a paper and use more paraphrasing.  This makes the paper stronger and therefore I tried to do so in my paper.  I think that my paper had strengths because it was a good topic and each sub topic that I talked about in my paper was interesting.  Another strength was that the information from my articles and journals that I added in made the paper even more appealing.  However, like all papers, mine also had some weaknesses.  I feel as though I sometimes jumped around a bit too much in my writing and the paper didn’t flow as well as I wanted it too.  I tried to fix this but I still feel as though it needs some work.  Also, I wish I could have found one more topic to write about under genetic engineering to make the paper a bit longer.  All in all, I believe that my paper was better than I thought it would be and I am very happy with the outcome.  To help in response to my work I would say to help with the flow of my paper and also help to maybe think of another sub topic that could be added as an extra paragraph to my paper.